Target: Improve planning. Take time to think about order, cohesion, progression of topics, APF, etc.
Task: Look at a power text, annotate it as much as is possible (in ten minutes) and then practise writing out an essay plan. Don't worry about timings the first time, but next time try to write the plan within ten minutes. Review the plans and see if they include a range of terminology, frameworks, etc. See if there is a clear order and sense of progression - and make sure topics can link back to the question and the APF. Make sure to think about evaluative discourse markers for cohesion of points.
Friday, 28 February 2014
Sunday, 2 February 2014
Language and Power Extracts
Leader's speech, Manchester 2013
DAD: That feelslike a lot of work for a school talent competition (He speaks into the phone with exaggerated pronunciation you use whenyou are speaking to a machine) Y-e-s. But it’s great you’re taking part, y-e-s…..(mutters) stupid machine.
MUM enters shouting behind her.
MUM: Look Karen, if both socks have got holes in,they match, just put them on!(She starts tidying up)
KAREN for some reason, has a washing-up bowl full of water and is cutting a shape out of some cardboard.
BEN: I couldalways sing… (sings in hisdeep voice) ‘And I said to myself…..’
The bell rings.
MUM: (has got some food muck in her hands) Oh….Who’s that?
Karen shouts.
KAREN (OOV): A man in a suit
Karen opens the door to a smart man in a suit. But she only opens the door a tiny bit, with the chain across.
ARMITAGE: Hello…
STUDENT: Hi
T: Grab some paper from the front, I'll go get you a text book
S: Right
T: Can you do some work?
S: Sir, what am I doing?
T: The big one
Student is stood, still not working
T: Okay, you need to sit down and do your detention. Sit down
S: I'm starving
T: So, cause you obviously want to pass your art GCSE you made sure that you went to Mr Gower's coursework detention?
S: Yeah but I forgot
T: There we are. Thank you very much
S: Errrr... that's silly though
T: Sorry, do you want me to let you fail your GCSEs?
S: I'm not gonna fail
T: Do you want me to let you fail?
S: No, but
David Cameron -
Cosmopolitan Interview with Miley Cyrus -
OUTNUMBERED script -
Dad is clearing up
breakfast stuff with a phone tucked under his chin.
DAD: That feelslike a lot of work for a school talent competition (He speaks into the phone with exaggerated pronunciation you use whenyou are speaking to a machine) Y-e-s. But it’s great you’re taking part, y-e-s…..(mutters) stupid machine.
BEN: I could do the
magic trick I did with, Gran. Herface when she thought I’d smashed
her watch with that hammer.
DAD: Well….you had.
BEN: Yeh…..I still
don’t know what went wrong there.
DAD: (into phone) Y-e-s
BEN: I think it was the
wrong kind of hammer
DAD: No, I said y-e-s.
BEN: Still, Gran likes
her new watch.
MUM enters shouting behind her.
MUM: Look Karen, if both socks have got holes in,they match, just put them on!(She starts tidying up)
DAD: I didn’t say
No….
JAKE: Yeh, just now.
You said ‘No I said ‘Yes’.
KAREN for some reason, has a washing-up bowl full of water and is cutting a shape out of some cardboard.
BEN: I couldalways sing… (sings in hisdeep voice) ‘And I said to myself…..’
DAD: (still to phone)
‘Go back’
BEN: ‘What a
wonderful world’
DAD: ‘Go back’
JAKE: Yeh, the only
disadvantage to singing is….that you can’t.
BEN: OK I’ve got
loads more ideas here. (He hands a list to DAD)
DAD: Er… impractical…
illegal… suicidal, Ben, you don’t even know what the ‘Wall of
Death’ is… ‘Go back’…
DAD Ben!.... Look at
the time, teeth.
MUM: (To JAKE) Jake,
you shouldn’t discourage him. It’s not good for his confidence.
In the background DAD
continues to struggle with the phone.
JAKE: Will it be good
forhis confidence when the whole school laughs at him?
The bell rings.
MUM: (has got some food muck in her hands) Oh….Who’s that?
Karen shouts.
KAREN (OOV): A man in a suit
DAD: See what he wants,
and if he’s a cold caller just do your stuff!
KAREN (OOV): Ok
DAD: (To the phone)
Gob-oh, f… ‘no –I wouldn’t –like –to –start -again, I
would -like-to-kill-myself’
Karen opens the door to a smart man in a suit. But she only opens the door a tiny bit, with the chain across.
ARMITAGE: Hello…
KAREN: They’re busy
ARMITAGE: Um….Can I
speak to your Mum and Dad?
KAREN: You’ve just
asked the question I answered. I’m sorry but Mum and Dad don’t
speak to cold callers.
ARMITAGE: I’m not a
cold caller
KAREN: Do we know you?
ARMITAGE: No, but…
KAREN: Did we know you
were going to call?
ARMITAGE: No, however…
KAREN: I think that
makes you a cold caller
The Guardian
Language is vital, not just to communicate
Educating Essex
Dialogue Between teacher and student
TEACHER: Come in,
welcome
STUDENT: Hi
T: Grab some paper from the front, I'll go get you a text book
S: Right
T: Can you do some work?
S: Sir, what am I doing?
T: The big one
Student is stood, still not working
T: Okay, you need to sit down and do your detention. Sit down
S: I'm starving
T: So, cause you obviously want to pass your art GCSE you made sure that you went to Mr Gower's coursework detention?
S: Yeah but I forgot
T: There we are. Thank you very much
S: Errrr... that's silly though
T: Sorry, do you want me to let you fail your GCSEs?
S: I'm not gonna fail
T: Do you want me to let you fail?
S: No, but
T: No, and
unfortunately, when a teacher says you need to do some study work,
coursework, revision work or whatever, you need to attend. Thank you.
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